I'm going to be blunt with you - your story needs a lot of work. I don't say that to be mean or judgmental - it's just the truth.
That said, if you want to have a story that is going to truly capture the attention of the YA audience, I'd be glad to help you get there.
I am currently finishing the final copy of the first book of a YA trilogy for another client - we won't start book two for a couple of months, so I have time to work on another project.
I'm a ghostwriter -- that's how I make my living. I do some work that is published under my own name, but most of my work is writing for others.
My bid is for rewriting the first five chapters that you have done. You have an interesting idea, but the grammar is marginal, the dialogue lacking, and characters are undeveloped. I can change that.
If you want to continue after those first five chapters are complete, we can discuss that at that time.
I look forward to hearing from you and discussing your project in detail.
Scott Berry
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